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Post by Quickster on Oct 30, 2010 17:42:49 GMT -8
Post some insightful/funny/epic quotes from your own work. And in the spirit of the new TS and increase in interest in critique, give some advice/tell the above person what you think of their work.
And I can't quite find/be bothered to find anything epic. <.<
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Post by nchaos on Nov 4, 2010 12:16:53 GMT -8
This is an awesome topic XD
-Butcher, Chapter 5
-Dredge, short story
-also from Dredge, probably my favorite personal bit of writing.
-Random quote from Lucid
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Post by Deleted on Nov 5, 2010 11:39:00 GMT -8
Quotes from Schadenfreude:
-Ross (It's from an AU one-shot, but still.)
-Alphonse and Mei, upon Xiao-Mei attaching herself to Al's shoulder.
-Ling, on carrying a frying pan around a restaurant.
-Ross, again.
A bit of angst to override the crack.
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Post by Maldeus on Nov 5, 2010 19:35:19 GMT -8
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Post by Deleted on Nov 6, 2010 21:58:37 GMT -8
Taken from my NaNo.
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Post by blenderbender on Nov 7, 2010 6:53:22 GMT -8
Are we allowed to have fanfics count? If so, I'm gonna have so much fun on this thread. If not, oh well. I'll still have fun.
"B-buh-buh" he stammered helplessly. "You're a-" "If you say 'You're a woman" I will slit your throat." she warned. -Some pirate hostage, and Dionisia in Fight Like A Girl: A Pirate's Tale.
"Nothing will ever make me join the Sapphire." Annie snapped firmly. "Well, what if I told you your boyfriend was missing and presumed captured by a rogue member?" he asked. "Well, that would be different." she replied. "Your boyfriend is missing and presumably captured by a rogue member." he said completely deadpan. Annie took a second for it to sink in. "Okay, that is just not fair!" she exclaimed, clearly annoyed. -Annie and Micheal. Annie and Alex
"So, you're telling us that we're godly incarnations, and if we don't help you, Satan, earth chick, dead girl, and magicky lady, the apocalypse is going to come?" Aldreda asked, her eyes not showing a hint of seriousness. "Essentially. By the way, their names are Hades, Persephone, Hestia, and Hecate." Athena replied, not even blinking. -Aldreda and Athena discuss the God Kids role in stopping the war among the Gods.
"Oh please! You have no reason to be mad at me!" Yahweh snapped at Isis. "Oh, no, of course not. I mean, you just sent the ten plagues on my people, why would I be mad?" Isis drawled sarcastically. "It was thousands of years ago! You people need to let it go!" Yahweh protested. - Yahweh and Isis do not get along.
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Post by Merlin on Nov 7, 2010 17:48:11 GMT -8
I like your first quote. Pretty funny. Xavier was sure that neither teleportation nor invisibility had been invented yet. He was also sure that the man standing in the street hadn’t been there a moment before. -First two sentences.
“I have no—ah!” Xavier yelped as something wrapped around his legs. He looked down, but saw nothing, even though he felt like each of his legs had been coated in plaster. He tried to run, but his legs were frozen in place. Several yards away, the woman turned back toward him, her smile transformed from sweet to satisfied. She beckoned Xavier toward her, and his legs moved of their own accord, dragging him forward.
-Xavier's encounter with a spellcaster.
A cry of, “Gyah!” woke him from his slumber. He sat straight up. Though the bright light of dawn stung his eyes, he could make out Frederick stumbling backward, dropping the makeshift spear he had been holding.
“I take it you expected a different outcome,” said Merenor’s voice.
“It—it—you talked!” Frederick stammered, now skittering backward on all fours.
Xavier stood up, twisting out of his metal cocoon. Frederick turned toward him. “There’s a talking lizard here!”
-Most people from Earth aren't used to talking animals.
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Post by blenderbender on Nov 8, 2010 18:14:37 GMT -8
While Annie and Alex walked toward the car, Annie had to smile at her friends, who had become so much like her family since they threw her out. The magic of the moment was shattered when they started throwing rice. Annie winced. She had never expected it to be painful in the slightest. When the rice didn't stop she turned and realized Rex was repeatedly reaching it into the basket he was holding and throwing huge handfuls at them. "Rex! Knock it off!" she squealed, almost laughing. Rex responded by throwing more handfuls at her. Alex grinned and put up a force field around them. "Hey! No force fields!" Rex whined. "Fine. See how you like it." Alex smirked, and he crossed over to Rex, reached in the basket, and began throwing the rice back at him. Soon the two were throwing rice in each others faces, laughing and yelling like they weren't at a wedding. - My favourite part of one of the sequels to Annie and Alex.
"In the past we fought against corruption in governments and to stand up for the innocent, the weak, and anyone who could not or would not stand up for themselves. We fought loyally for the Global Alliance. Then they betrayed us and slaughtered us. Until now we've lost an untold number of people we knew and loved. Leah, Harold, Kurt-" Naomi was interrupted by Aaliya who asked "Andre?" Noami grimaced at the mention of her husband. She's tried to hide how deeply his death hurt her. It would concern the others to much. "Yeah. Andre too. The difference is until now, we have become one of the oppressed peoples we once fought to defend. The Alliance will stop at nothing to get rid of us. Padma and a few other members have tried to tell us we'll be okay. We aren't! They're going to try to kill us all." There were several murmurs and yells of outrage from the people. Naomi waited until they were done. "Until now, we've stayed underground, hoping that they would forget about us until we could strike. Well, that obviously isn't working. They are ammassing an army. They'll strike this time next week. By that time we need to be ready to strike back against them. If we don't then they will get more fighters until the sheer force of numbers will overwhelm us. That is a fact. We will fight corruption with terror, and leave a mark so deep that we will be able to topple the Alliance's administration and prevent anybody from having to go through this sort of oppression again. That is also a fact." Naomi left her people cheering and chatting about plans. -Naomi rallies her group to war in Never Back Down.
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Post by Deleted on Nov 8, 2010 22:06:31 GMT -8
The Butcher, in the short story Carnivores.
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Post by Deleted on Nov 8, 2010 23:01:08 GMT -8
A short one from my old short horror story "Sleep". It isn't one of my best.
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Post by Deleted on Nov 10, 2010 8:40:24 GMT -8
"There it is." He said. "The ancient legendary artifact that defeated the dragon one-thousand years ago."
"You really think that rusty old piece of crap will helps us?" She said, gesturing to the shapeless mound of rust embedded in the rock.
"Of course it will, we'll find out what it is, recreate it and then we'll be able to kill the dragon and live in..."
She walked over and tapped it once, the ancient weapon they had been searching for for two weeks crumpled into dust.
"We're fucked." He said.
"You think?" She said, waving her hand to stop the dust from getting into her eyes.
-From the yet unnamed story I've been working on for over a year (also unedited, so it's a bit sloppy).
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Post by blenderbender on Nov 10, 2010 17:04:40 GMT -8
"Let me get this straight, I've been asked to train the chosen one, and I trained the wrong twin?!" Aly screeched.
"Looks that way." Horus grumbled.
"When the kingdom falls, I won't blame anyone but myself." she promised. -The Plight of the Chosen Ones, Aly and Horus discuss the training of the twins.
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Post by Quickster on Nov 10, 2010 21:30:39 GMT -8
“No, Alison just got all…” Unable to describe her Dimitri shrugs. “She got all Alison-y?” Ryan asks. “Is that a combination of bitchy, pushy, and annoyed?” Laughing at the words he smiles and answers, “Pretty much… Don’t worry about her I’ll come get you when I go home, and if she says anything just ignore her.”
- Void, Dimitri and Ryan talking about Alison (Ryan's wife).
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Post by Saeran on Nov 12, 2010 19:25:46 GMT -8
from Here Be Monsters when Lyall goes into one of his fits of insanity.
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Post by Deleted on Nov 12, 2010 23:54:44 GMT -8
From Revelation chapter one, Asgard's point of veiw on what he used to be like.
From chapter two of Revelation, Azzy comments on the way he treated his father.
Somehwere in time from a furthur book of Godhood, Amaterasu is currently beating the shiz out of her son (...lovely).
Somehwere in the final book of Godhood, Asgard realises he inherited a flaw of egotism from his mother.
Last novel, Asgard VS Amaterasu for the crown of reality. Ryujin tries to toss a coin in Asgard's favour. It does, however, land in Amaterasu's favour.
Asgard ranting over how he can only fly where there is nothing (Space) while his mother, Amaterasu, can fly whenever she wants.
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Post by neoeevee on Dec 10, 2010 20:55:32 GMT -8
Quotes from Schadenfreude:-Ross (It's from an AU one-shot, but still.) -Alphonse and Mei, upon Xiao-Mei attaching herself to Al's shoulder. -Ling, on carrying a frying pan around a restaurant. -Ross, again. A bit of angst to override the crack. Neo wants to read this~ ANYWAY, in the same fanfic-y vein; -Quote from Roxas's journal.
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Post by Deleted on Dec 15, 2010 11:22:18 GMT -8
To comment on the above post: you get major brownie points for doing FMA stuff. The quotes for Kingdom Hearts rather make them seem like a very disfunctional family (Think 'Little Miss Sunshine') and that works perfectly. Had me laughing quite a lot. The quote below takes place after the main character (Cal) pulls back Marth's jacket and presses her hand to his heart, trying to make a point. (Think Disney's Tarzan, people) "....so...your method of therapy is to start taking off my clothes? Do continue." -Marth This other scene is more graphic: after electrocuting a boy to death, one of the villains says: "Medium rare. Just right." -Hades And this next scene happens when the main character and her love interest are talking, just after said love interest has been rescued from confinement.
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Post by Salad Of The Dead on Dec 19, 2010 22:23:01 GMT -8
Random thought for a possible novel.
“A motive? Hahahaha.” A high pitched laugh of relief filled the room. “My dear boy, only simple minded fools need a motive to kill. I am a writer, a mother, your everyday house wife. They will never find a motive for those murders. I’d easily get off with an insanity plea.” Sarah sighed leaning against the table before looking back at the foreign lawyer. She patted herself down before pulling out a cigarette from her pants pocket. "Even I, could weave a tale that I could take to my grave."
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Post by Tim Willard on Dec 21, 2010 0:47:50 GMT -8
From "Fraker the Axe & The Magic Sheep"
"Why are you carrying a sheep?" Holt asked.
Fraker looked down at the sheep he was carrying in one massive hand and frowned. "It's a magic sheep."
"Really? What does it do?"
"I'm not sure." Fraker suddenly smiled, looking down at the farmer. "I think you have to have sex with it!"
"Uh, what?" Holt asked.
"There's two types of people in the Six Worlds, friend." Fraker said, hefting his axe to draw the farmer's attention to it. "Those who make sweet sweet love to the possibly magic sheep first, and those with axes." He looked at Holt's hand. "You, friend, appear to be holding a garden hoe."
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Post by Saeran on Dec 24, 2010 1:02:30 GMT -8
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Post by Captain Victoria on Jan 1, 2011 17:53:42 GMT -8
Alistair: It's written in some strange, foreign language. Eric: No. That's just your crippling illiteracy.
Atina: That's a vampire... Aquaria: Does it sparkle? Why isn't it sparkling? It's burning! Atina: Why would it sparkle...? Aquaria: I don't know why I said that....
Alistair (To Eckar) : Come on, buddy! Don't be upset! Get drunk!
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Post by nchaos on Jan 17, 2011 14:34:39 GMT -8
^ I lol'd.
Nyctophobia, very short story.
From a currently unnamed short story.
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Post by bijoukaiba on Jan 19, 2011 22:41:37 GMT -8
Ah... does fanfiction count? The Culprit Is...? (Scooby Doo and HOUSE crossover): “'Test me for any illnesses you want. I’ll take all of them. I’ll do anything to help him feel better.' Daphne stated fearlessly ... '...I still love him.'" Swordplay (my SSBM fanfic): "Love is love, and neither race nor gender should decide who you care about." - Princess Zelda "He had first realized it when he kissed Marth that winter, but he tried to ignore it. When Zelda asked him, he tried to deny it. But that kiss... and how quickly he gave in to kissing the prince in the first place... now there was nowhere to hide, nowhere to run, and nothing he could do about it. Link knew. He loved Marth." - (just plain narration) The Falsebound Kingdom (a Yuugiou fanfic): "'Then get off the ground,' Kaiba replied. 'If you're going to serve in my army, you can't bow to people stronger than you.'" "'The Warrior of Light's greatness is only a story, a prophecy that we can't prove exists. Your greatness... is nothing but lies. There is nothing great about you at all.'" Graysnow (an OC) to Kaiba. ((to make the citizens of a city accept him, Kaiba lied about being a prophetic hero. Previously, he had actually been a general that served the corrupt empire mistreating the same citizens)) "'And to think, I really had faith he was the one to end this dark empire,'" He [Graysnow] sighed. "'But I was wrong.'" He stared solemnly at the vandalized Shining Plaza. "'There is no light of truth... within this falsebound kingdom.'" Graysnow The Prophecy of the Warrior of Light (still from "The Falsebound Kingdom"): Before I died, I wrote upon this scroll That I might live again, inside Another hero's soul
As the Warrior of Light, I am forced to ask That he defeats DarkNite A frightening task
Your tests have begun, And they shan't be easy To find the Great One, Seek the signs - there are three
For the very first test, You must use your eyes To restore a lost goddess To her home in the skies
Next, for the Hero, The gods have made A legendary trio - The Dragons of AID
The last test is tricky, And a tough trick at that; What is it that you can't see, Yet always look at?
Eventually the darkness shall seek a fight Only then can you call on the Warrior of Light.
But always remember, when the battles begin The victor is determined by the light found within. (some of the lines are crummy, but I love that poetic prophecy)
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Post by Lil' Raskol LobLaw on Jan 29, 2011 19:54:27 GMT -8
-Shawn "You Ever Watch A Car Wreck"
-Various Characters, "The Fame"
-Vincent, "Love Is A Battlefield"
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Post by limelightqueen on Jan 30, 2011 14:33:53 GMT -8
It's a little overwrought but I do love it. Almost makes me root for Leo/Ellie even though I'm almost positive he's going to end up with Annie.
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Post by WolfGod on Jan 30, 2011 17:44:20 GMT -8
From Bone Daddy and the Skeleton Crew.
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Post by Mikashi on Feb 6, 2011 14:24:07 GMT -8
--The Engraved, Chapter One
--The Engraved, Chapter One
--The Engraved, Chapter One (again)
--The Engraved, Chapter One (This is the last excerpt from this chapter, I swear!)
--The Engraved, Chapter Two
--The Engraved, Chapter Two
--The Engraved, Chapter Two (only a few more excerpts, I swear!)
--The Engraved, Chapter Two (the last excerpt, considering that I'm not done writing said-chapter yet.
I may look into my other stories later, but right now, I'm kinda too lazy. Hopefully, they were funny --I was trying to grab the funny ones--.
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Post by daringdani on Feb 6, 2011 20:06:08 GMT -8
I wrote those after my boyfriend broke up with me since my character had gone through a similar thing that I needed to write, and I got these. I actually really liked how my writing turned out when I was in emotional distress. It was, honestly, the best muse to have.
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Post by shiko on Feb 9, 2011 16:15:35 GMT -8
- A Silly Love Story ,chapter one
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