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Post by Elentari on Nov 13, 2010 14:38:39 GMT -8
The thing is, I'm working on this one story, and there is something I'd like to get little advice about. I was hoping that maybe you guys could give your opinions on the matter.
So, the story is partially about the romantic relationship between this pretty average girl and an immortal guy. I know, it sounds cliche when you say it like that, but I don't really want to reveal that much about the story since it is still in progress. Anyway, the thing is that no matter how and what I write, their relationship keeps becoming a bit... not weird, but especially not what I intended it to be. The guy, even if he is about 3000 years old and has some awesome magical powers, ends up being pretty co-dependent. He is so needy and clingy and she is emotionally so much stronger than he is.
The question is that should I let the story be and start it all over again, or should I let it be and make his co-dependency a plot point? What do you guys think?
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Demeter
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Post by Demeter on Nov 13, 2010 14:51:16 GMT -8
Do you want the co-dependency to be a plot point? If you want it to be one, then let it be. If you don't, then you should probably make some changes.
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Post by Elentari on Nov 13, 2010 15:06:13 GMT -8
Do you want the co-dependency to be a plot point? If you want it to be one, then let it be. If you don't, then you should probably make some changes. That's the problem - I'm not sure. I rather like the idea of making him weaker than her, but I don't know if that's what I should do. Of course, I'm not going to present is as any kind of ultimate and greatest love of all, anyway. |
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Post by Demeter on Nov 13, 2010 16:24:17 GMT -8
Do you want the co-dependency to be a plot point? If you want it to be one, then let it be. If you don't, then you should probably make some changes. That's the problem - I'm not sure. I rather like the idea of making him weaker than her, but I don't know if that's what I should do. Of course, I'm not going to present is as any kind of ultimate and greatest love of all, anyway. I say make the co-dependency a subplot. If you don't like it, then you can always edit. |
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Post by Blue Suede Shoes on Nov 13, 2010 16:28:02 GMT -8
I would write it and see how it goes. If you don't like how it turns out, change it for the next draft. Since you aren't sure one way or the other, I think you should just let it develop naturally and evaluate the results rather than the concept alone.
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Post by Darth Pichu on Nov 13, 2010 19:14:44 GMT -8
Personally I think you should think about your character. Why do you think he's developing the way he is. If he's co-dependent, there has to be a reason why. Was it part of his past, is he simply a lonely person, and the idea of having someone else there to rely on is so enthralling to him that he can't seem to let her go.
I mean, the idea isn't that far fetched. If he has (somehow) been alone for thousands of years, the prospect of finally having someone to share time with must be liberating in a way. Or perhaps you can tie the fact that he's being clingy just to someone who's life is endless time has a lot less impact (after all, if your life is never going to end, why worry about the days weeks or years.) He's probably seen being grow up and die so fast that people seem like mice to him, so now that he's found someone he really wants it makes sense that he'd want to spend every waking moment with her before she dies. That'd be one way to justify his co-dependence. Perhaps he's not really being co-dependent at all and simply forsees and fears what the(for him very near) future will hold.
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Post by Elentari on Nov 14, 2010 6:44:40 GMT -8
Personally I think you should think about your character. Why do you think he's developing the way he is. If he's co-dependent, there has to be a reason why. Was it part of his past, is he simply a lonely person, and the idea of having someone else there to rely on is so enthralling to him that he can't seem to let her go. I do think it's the mix of his loneliness and past relationships that make him so clingy. He has had some romances, but they always seem to end badly. He had this very potential relationship once, and he wanted to marry her, but she died in childbirth. So when the heroine comes along, and she seems to be different from the women he used to love, he becomes needy. I think it's pretty much because she looks at him in a way no one else ever has. I can actually see her even kicking his ass for his neediness. Anyway, thanks for all the answers! I think I might go along with this neediness of the protagonist. It already seems to be a crucial part of his personality and I don't know if I want to go and change that. I don't know why, but I somehow like the idea of this girl being emotionally and mentally stronger than him. I do have to work on it still, though. |
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